Second Lesson

“Oke, sekarang pelajaran bab dua anak-anak.”

Sepertinya, kata-kata tersebut tidak mungkin akan didengar bila Pito gurunya. Hahaha. Cobalah, main-main ke peraduannya yang gelap itu, di sana ada beberapa lesson dari english club yang sudah berjalan selama ini. Edyan bangets, bukan? Hahhh, saya pun tak habis pikir.

Nah, di second lesson ini, ternyata eh ternyata, saya malah melakukan lebih banyak kesalahan. Lihatlah yang dicoret dan diwarnai kian banyak. Fuhhh….apa yang harus saya lakukan? Jawabannya mudah, “Ya belajar terus.” kata guru saya itu.

Dan dia galak juga, lho. Jadi hati-hati sama dia, apalagi kalau sudah menyalak, eh? err…. Apa masih mau belajar? Ah, kok ya bandel, sih?

Kalau begitu, demi memuaskan hasrat kalian, ini dia tulisan saya, revisinya dan akhirnya tulisan jadi. Syumonggo….

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A few days ago, a friend of mine sent me an email. This is about the emperor, a knight and his horse.

One day, the emperor gives an order to the knight. Actually, this order as a price to the knight because he was very brave to push the enemy away.

The emperor said that the knight and his horse could go around the emperor land in only one day. Then, the whole areas that cover by the horse and the knight might become the knight property.

In order to get as much as land he wanted, the knight don’t remember to stop for a while to give the horse eat and drink. He has been keeping the horse to run and run, suddenly the horse became very tired and finally it is passed away.

On the other hand, the knight never gives up. He continued the journey on foot. As he walked a moment, he realized then that it was going to sunset. This is the limit of time given by the emperor. Frantically, the knight pushes himself very hard. Regardless the limit power of his body.

In the end, he down to earth, his body refused the order from his mind. He cannot stand any longer. In this very moment, he noticed that all he actually need only two square meters to bury his dead body.

An eagle comes picked up his soul….

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A few days ago, a friend of mine sent me an email. This is It was (SENTENCE CONCORD!!! Always stick to the past tense! Make up your mind whether to use past or present!) about the an (it’s a kind of fairy tale, thus, I don’t think ‘the’ is needed since all fairy tales don’t have any special king to be attributed with ‘the’) emperor, a knight and his horse.

One day, the emperor gave an order to the knight. Actually, this order (get yourself used to pronoun, so you don’t repeat the subject over and over again. It’s kind of boring to the reader) it was as a price prize (some words are tricky. Watch it!) to the knight because he was very brave to push the enemy away.

The emperor said that the knight and his horse could go around the emperor land in only one day. Then, the whole areas that covered by the horse and the knight might become the knight property could be theirs (well, I can’t say you have written the incorrect phrase. I just don’t like people writing one object or subject over and over again. Toldcha. It’s booooooooring!).

In order to get (are you trying to write a thesis here, or tell a story? Avoid using formal words if you intent to write informal notes. How to differentiate between both? READ!) as much as land as he wanted, the knight don’t did not remember to give the horse something to eat and drink and stop time to rest for a while. He has been keeping kept pushing the horse to run and run, and suddenly finally the horse it became very tired and finally it is passed away (remember KISS? Keep It Simple, Stupid! Haha!).

On the other hand, the knight never gives gave up. He continued the journey on foot. As he walked for a moment, he realized then that it was going to sunset, This is the limit of time the time limit given by the emperor. Frantically, the knight pushes he pushed himself very hard. Regardless the limit power of his body the power limitation he had.

In the end, he fell down to earth, his body refused the order from his mind. He can could not stand any longer. In this very moment, he noticed that all he actually need only was only two square meters to bury his dead body.

(Then, along came) an eagle comes to picked up his soul…

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A few days ago, a friend of mine sent me an email. It was about an emperor, a knight and his horse.

One day, the emperor gave an order to the knight. Actually, it was as a prize to the knight because he was very brave to push the enemy away.

The emperor said that the knight and his horse could go around the emperor land in only one day. Then, the whole areas covered by the horse and the knight could be theirs.

To get as much land as he wanted, the knight did not remember to give the horse something to eat and drink and time to rest for a while. He kept pushing the horse to run and run, and finally it became very tired and passed away.

On the other hand, the knight never gave up. He continued the journey on foot. As he walked for a moment, he realized that it was sunset, the time limit given by the emperor. Frantically, he pushed himself very hard. Regardless the power limitation he had.

In the end, he fell down, his body refused the order from his mind. He could not stand any longer. In this very moment, he noticed that all he actually need was only two square meters to bury his dead body.

Then, along came an eagle to pick up his soul…

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Bagus ya, jadinya? Hayah….