First Lesson

Pito baru saja membuka botolnya yang ke dua. Botol berisi cairan seputih susu itu mengeluarkan aroma yang memikat. Tak berapa lama, mulailah dia meracau. Saya pun, manggut-manggut mendengarkan aneka rupa petuahnya.  Di antara semua ocehannya yang ajaib itu, hahaha, ada pula saran agar saya tidak takut untuk menulis dalam Bahasa Inggris. “Udah, hajar aja!” Begitu kurang lebih pesannya.

Meskipun begitu, tetap saja, saya merasa kurang percaya diri. Maka, diam-diam saya menyusun strategi–halah! Saya berencana akan mengirimkan email kepadanya, berupa tulisan saya dalam Bahasa Inggris yang masih acak-adul. Harapannya, nanti tulisan saya akan diperiksanya, ada saran darinya dan bagaimana cara yang benar menuliskannya. Saya juga tertarik untuk mengikuti kelas BHI english club yang diasuhnya itu.

Maka inilah dia, percobaan menulis saya itu. Harapannya dengan ditulis di sini, bisa memudahkan saya juga bila sewaktu-waktu ingin membuka catatan. Di bawah ini, ada tiga tulisan. Pertama, tulisan asli dari saya. Ke dua, revisi dan saran yang dibuat Pito. Ke tiga, hasil akhir tulisan jadinya. Mau belajar juga? Hyuukkkk….

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as your suggestion for me this morning, that i should try to write in english….

so, please check this note and i hope you not mind to give attention in every mistakes i have made in this note, hehehe

[...]I have just finished seen ‘Public Enemies’. It was a good movie, indeed.

The movie tells us about Johny Billinger, a bank robbery. How he stole money from the bank and escaped from the biro investigation. Also, don’t forget about his love to gorgeous girl whom he met in the party.

I’ve try to find a memorable quote that won’t go from my mind trough the internet. But again and again I just found the same quote. Actually, in the end I couldn’t find quotes I meant.

Well, this is a quote from Johny to Billie, his girl friend. I little forget what the pre action, but he just say that this doesn’t important about our origin. The most important is our destination, where we will go?

Have you ever heard about this quote before? [...]

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as for your request, i think i could give high light and explanation in different font color in between brackets as explanation, as follows:

as your suggestion for me this morning, that i should try to write in english….

so, please check this note and i hope you not (don’t. i mind means i reluctant. i don’t mind means i’m not reluctant in doing it) mind to give attention in every mistakes i have made in this note, hehehe

[...]I have just finished seen ‘Public Enemies’. It was a good movie, indeed.

The movie tells (sentence concord–as my teacher said–is the most important thing in writing. in the first paragraph, you used past, so, it supposed to be past also) us about Johny Billinger, a bank robbery (check the dictionary. robbery is the action, while the person commits robbery is called robber). How (i don’t think ‘how’ is needed) he stole money from the bank and escaped from the biro investigation. Also, don’t forget about his love to gorgeous girl whom he met in the party.

I’ve try (tried, but i think ‘i’ve been trying’ is more proper) to find a memorable quote that won’t go from my mind trough the internet (“i’ve been trying to find a memorable quote trough the internet, the quote that won’t go from my mind”. what do you think if you put that sentence this way?). But again and again I just found the same quote. Actually, in the end I couldn’t find quotes I meant (haha! that’s funny! no, you haven’t made any mistakes in this one).

Well, this is a quote from Johny to Billie, his girl friend. I little forget what the pre action (was), but he just say (said) that this doesn’t important about our origin (‘it’s not important where we come from’?). The most important is our destination, where we will go (where will we go)?

Have you ever heard about this quote before? [...]

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I had just finished watching ‘Public Enemies’. It was a good movie, indeed.

The movie told us about Johny Billinger, a bank robber. He stole money from the bank and escaped from the bureau of investigation. Also, he could not forget about his love to a gorgeous girl whom he met in the party.

I’ve been trying to find a memorable quote through the internet, the one that won’t go from my mind. But again and again I just found the same quotes. And actually, in the end, I couldn’t find the quotes that I meant.

Well, this is a quote from Johny to Billie, his girlfriend. I quite forget what the pre action was, but he just said ‘where we came from is not important. The most important is our destination, to where we will go’.

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fuhhhh…. *ngelap keringet*